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Post by imabasketcase on Sept 23, 2015 18:50:33 GMT
Maybe this should be interpreted as, "I should have hope, but it's all meaningless in the end" something similar like that? Yeah, that's what I was going for. But it does sound confusing. I'll probably reword it. |
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Post by imabasketcase on Sept 24, 2015 4:54:41 GMT
I think this version is better.
I've lost track of the days of my life
I don't want to grow old
I don't want to keep up this life
And they say
To keep moving foward
It'll always get better
But in time
The cliches lose all meaning
And are exposed as lies
All my hopes and dreams
Burn into the night sky
As they go up flames
Watch the smoke as it climbs up to the sky
My days are numbered
My time running out
My dreams died long ago
My flame has burnt out
I'll take these bridges
I'll burn them at my feet
I'll fade into an echo
I'll become a memory
The smoke from my burning dreams
Fills my lungs with hopeless air
And it's suffocating me
I'm tired of my nightmares
I can barely breathe
Please save me a prayer
My days are numbered
My time running out
My dreams died long ago
My flame has burnt out
I'll take these bridges
I'll burn them at my feet
I'll fade into an echo
I'll become a memory
(Bridge)
I can't sleep tonight
I can't close my eyes
I can't take more lies
I can't see the light
At the end of the tunnel, that's supposed to be there for me
When it all gets better, and it was just a bad dream
But the lies that they tell you, they don't mean a damn thing
There's no reason to care, it's so hard to believe
In all of my dreams that meant so much to me
Before they were broken and burned at my feet
Before I lost hope and I still could see
Who I was becoming and wanted to be
But I can't keep up, anymore
My days are numbered
My time running out
My dreams died long ago
My flame has burnt out
I'll take these bridges
I'll burn them at my feet
I'll fade into an echo
I'll become a memory
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Post by Deleted on Sept 24, 2015 7:12:19 GMT
And they say
To keep moving foward
It'll always get better
I personally think the new lyrics are not so appealing, too common....
The new version might be less confusing but I find the original better
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Post by imabasketcase on Dec 12, 2015 7:02:17 GMT
Something I've been working on...
I feel like I've been sleeping on needles all day
I can't fight the feelings I've had of you all day
You're all I see when I'm in the dark
I keep trying but I missed the mark
You're all I think of when I sleep at night
I would thank you if you could just take my sight
I don't want to see you anymore
I just wanna lay here on the floor
You broke me down just to build me up
You broke me back down just to build me back up
I'm chasing you in circles, oh my head
Maybe I'll get lucky and wind up dead
It's better than living like you're the one who bled
If I ever see you again, I hope it's only in red
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Post by Mohican. on Dec 12, 2015 17:59:23 GMT
I'm chasing you in circles, oh my head Maybe I'll get lucky and wind up dead It's better than living like you're the one who bled If I ever see you again, I hope it's only in red  I'm all for the creative, don't get me wrong; I like metaphors and allegories, I just really think you are extreme in your writing. It reminds me of my writing when I was 16 and really really mad at the world as well as depressed. I like anger in songs and drama, too, but it doesn't appear to be fiction to me. The lyrics you post here make me believe that you are revealing a lot of you, which of course is okay, but do you wanna expose yourself to vulnerability? I usually like lyrics with a parted happy end, some lines that show that someone has not completely given up, but that's just me thinking. |
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